my message is powerful but I could repeat 3 trillion somewhere, or tie it in better.
.make sure people know that it a collection of things not individual
.music great!
.impactful ending
.more pop in the opening, play with scale
.fix awkward shifts between scenes
.minor polishing of motions
.2nd fact stays on too long
.some green and black and grey not diagonal
.instead of words piling up, try scrolling up
.world hunger part too fast
.bump up the volume on the beginning visually
.move oil photo up
.maybe 3 tril gets really big?
.repeat three things in the list
.good end
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